First I want to say....Noobs
. You wasted good RP by writing some lousy stuff, that realistically wont be commented. So here is what I wrote, and It is already added. If you dont like something, just tell, and I will fix it, but do it fast.
Learn from the elder, watch how it is done by Overlord Buttpirate
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*Camera cuts to parking lot where Zeno Kichi is going to his car*
(Picture of Zeno)
*Before entering the car Zeno checks his pockets, but founds no car keys, so he turns around and goes back to the arena, to his lockers.*
*As he walks away, his car suddenly goes BOOM and explodes, making Zeno fall down from explosion wave*
*The dust rises up as the smoke goes all around the parking lot, the fire is raising high from his car, and the police and firemen sirens are heard immediately coming from the city*
*Tall man appears from the dust going through the flames near the exploded car*
*Zeno coughs from the smokes and looks up to see who is this man, as the fire goes blazing and lights up the night, Darkenius Storm's face reveals*
(Picture of Darkenius)
Darkenius Storm : I will have my fight! YOU CANNOT ESCAPE ME FOREVER!
*Darkenius walks by lied down Zeno and kicks him into the ribs, before he walks away*
*Zeno still terrified and confused at the sight of his burning car, looks back at Darkenius, catching for breath and coughing*
Zeno Kichi : You bastard....come back! YOU ARE DEAD! You hear me? DEAD!
*As the police, firemen arrives Darkenius have already disappeared, policemen quickly goes to help Zeno, while firemen try to save what they can from the car.*
Subject: Darkenius Storm and Zeno Kichi - car explosion (25th august) 
Wed Aug 21, 2013 9:42 am
If yes, write the name of your car and write what you will say about that explosion, because you know who did it ;)You can fix some parts if it's not good enough
